Thank you for your application! We were really excited to see a number of novel ideas that you presented here, such as dysmorphia as a difficulty of adjusting to the Real, and his persistent belief in souls. We have a few changes we'd like you to make before we give approval.

▶ REVISIONS

• For Dust's age, can you please clarify what you mean by being a few days old while also being entirely mentally developed? Is his only being a few days old in reference to his maturity level, moral reasoning, and so on? Please be informed that characters who are extremely psychologically under-developed/immature are unlikely to be selected for extraction and possibly unlikely to succeed in separating themselves mentally from their Matrix, due to their tendency toward concrete thinking.
  
  
• We appreciate the detail you have put into Dust's anomalies, but feel that at the moment, it reads a little too steeped in video game logic, especially in reference to Platforming Skills, Parry, and Immortality. Platforming and Parry do not come across very much as powers so much as skills that could be described as being super strong or agile, and Immortality either requires some thorough explanation/justification or removal (we can provide some examples of approved mechanics), as it reads like a video game mechanic rather than an integrated super power.
  
  There is also the line that states Dust is 'capable of grabbing airplanes out of the air and slamming them into the ground' which is in the paragraph about sword skills, but doesn't seem relevant to sword skills. It is not clear how he achieves this, or if this is resultant of crazy world mechanics of the Matrix he is from. If this is again a demonstration of superstrength and martial prowess, or magical ability, then please describe this in simple but generalizable terms.
  
  Please revise your anomalies section by resolving some of the above issues. Make certain to separate things like the possibly fantastical physics of the game world that Dust is from, versus what anomalies Dust has and will be taking with him.

▶ NOTE

• We would like to note that you have opted to make Dust relatively new, he would not be his ideal optimum for his Real world physical skills for some time. It might take at least a year of dedicated, bodily (out-of-sim) training to achieve the level you're describing as the muscle memory necessary for this level of prowess requires repetition and practice, even if he is intellectually capable. This does not need to be revised, but we want you to bear it in mind that this should be in progress. It could also be cool to play up the contrast between Real competence and in-Matrix skill if you prefer, as Dust’s aversion to the Real and dysmorphia were very interesting to us!
  
  
• This is not a requirement, but we would like to offer that instead of the Gladius, Dust could have been on board an NPC run hoverbarge known as the Shangrila! If it fits. This would give him CR with established NPCs, as well as hooks with other PCs, and a stronger connection with context. Sorry this information wasn’t available to you prior to this writeup, we are working on it, and further information shall be clear by the time you are approved.

You have 72 hours to complete these changes. Please let us know via comment here or PM to unplug if you require more time.